DESCRIBE A PERSONE

Lamia is a cheerful,outgoing,sweet,crazy girl,who happened to be my best friend ever !!
lamita ,as i always like to call her ,is a tiny girl with  dark curly long hair and beautiful brown eyes .she´s my friend since childhood,in which we had great times together and  led crazy adventures in  our tiny imaginary world .However Lamia may seem crazy but she´s that kind of people who give it all to you without waiting any thing from you,she´s the person to relay on when the whole world let you down ,so basically she is my angel and the sister that i always wanted.





PEER RESPONSE
I feel really identified with your paragraph! I think that everyone in the world have a friend that means the same as lamia to you.
Anyway dear writer I´ll try to make you improve your paragraph a bit,but it will be difficult since you write in a marbles way.
When i read your paragraph ,the first thing i really miss is a powerful conclusion sentence, nevertheless your actual one is good but I believe that u would make it better if you put ,for instant a rhetoric exclamation such as "i love you lamia";On the other side you may add more supporting sentences to make your paragraph even more stronger.
Finally I only want to thank you because your text really made me remember my best friend and all the good memories about us and our childhood.